Latin Prose Poems

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I have written two latin poems of sorts and wanted more experienced latin speakers opinions and feedback::

"Dum Vivimus, Vivamus"

dum spirimus, speramus
dum somnimus, amemus
dum vivimus, vivamus

whilst we breathe, let us hope
whilst we dream, let us love
whilst we live, let us live
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"Deficere Non Eligendum Est"

homo sum
Atque errare humanum est
Cuiusvis hominis est errare
nullius nisi insipientis in errore perseverare

Omne initium est difficile
Luctor et emergo
flectandum, non frangar
Atque nemini Cedimus

Quia
Deficere Non Eligendum Est

I am a man
and it is human to err
Any man can make a mistake
only a fool keeps making the same one

Every beginning is difficult
I struggle but I'll survive
I may bend but i will not break
and I yield to no one

because
failure is not an option


Thanks
 
 

Matthaeus

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There are no such words spirimus and somnimus. I'm not sure what you mean by the title; I see it as "while we live, may we live" which doesn't really make sense to me.

Omne initium est difficile
Luctor et emergo
flectandum, non frangar
Atque nemini Cedimus
Since you have two first person singular verbs in the second line and one in the third, why the sudden change into first person plural in the last? Just a verb consistency problem.

Wouldn't it be better to write luctor sed emergam, flectar sed non frangar?

There are many points here which others can discuss more fully. These are only my suggestions.
 
 

Matthaeus

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Bitmap dixit:
Quare Anglice loquimini in hoc foro? :>
Hercle, id oblitus sum :oops:

Tantummodo Latine hic loquamur, benkammy!
 
 

cinefactus

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Bitmap dixit:
nonne dicitur qui autem dixerit fatue reus erit gehennae ignis ;)
 

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Bitmap dixit:
Quasus dixit:
Mattheō
NB hujus reī oblītus sum
nec sententia matthei falsa est.
Dāte veniam. Jūstē enim ab aliīs scrīpta aestimāre multō difficilius est quam
rēctē scrībere. :oops:
 
 

Matthaeus

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Verba post vocem obliviscor aut in casu genitivo aut accusativo scribi possunt, sed præsertim, fateor, in genitivo.
 

Cato

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mattheus dixit:
Verba post vocem obliviscor aut in casu genitivo aut accusativo scribi possunt, sed præsertim, fateor, in genitivo.
Grammatica de verbo obliviscor similis verbo meminisse interpretari possit.
 
 

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Ita vero, id scivi. :)
 
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Etiam si verbum obliviscendi non cum casu accusativo componi posset, pronomen "id" credo rectum futurum fuisse. Verbis intransitivis solent et pronomina neutra adiungi.

mattheus dixit:
sed præsertim, fateor, in genitivo.
ii casūs disparia significant. Accusativus rem ipsam, genitivus et rem et quae ad rem (vel hominem) pertineant. Qua de causa illud verbum, si de rebus dicitur, saepius accusativo adiuncto invenitur; sin de hominibus dicitur, casus accusativus rarus est.
 
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