Save my life translating this passage
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fare enough.. I will do that 
I tried the first passage ... What you think?
Juluis Caesar finally returned to Rome from Africa. Four years of civil war now, a civil war throughout the whole world, and he had conquered the entire world. So he led the triumphs. When Gaius heard about the triumph, he said to his son, “If you want to see the commander and his soldiers, we must wake up in first light.”
The next day, when raised, they are ready to leave quickly. They hurried to the market without delay. When they arrived, a huge crowd was already present.
Soon after the triumphal procession approached. Gaius and his son could hear spectator’s shouts. The first soldiers arrived then the wagons passed, which carried the spoils of war. One of the wagons show them this title: I came, I saw, I conquered. After the wagons, prisoners marched through the streets. Finally, the emperor Caesar himself arrived. While Caesar's chariot passed Gaius, suddenly the axis brake. Caesar himself almost fell to the ground, but without a delay he jumped out of the chariot and the capitol climbed up by his foots. All the men shouted in joy.
I tried the first passage ... What you think?
Juluis Caesar finally returned to Rome from Africa. Four years of civil war now, a civil war throughout the whole world, and he had conquered the entire world. So he led the triumphs. When Gaius heard about the triumph, he said to his son, “If you want to see the commander and his soldiers, we must wake up in first light.”
The next day, when raised, they are ready to leave quickly. They hurried to the market without delay. When they arrived, a huge crowd was already present.
Soon after the triumphal procession approached. Gaius and his son could hear spectator’s shouts. The first soldiers arrived then the wagons passed, which carried the spoils of war. One of the wagons show them this title: I came, I saw, I conquered. After the wagons, prisoners marched through the streets. Finally, the emperor Caesar himself arrived. While Caesar's chariot passed Gaius, suddenly the axis brake. Caesar himself almost fell to the ground, but without a delay he jumped out of the chariot and the capitol climbed up by his foots. All the men shouted in joy.
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Just looking at the first bit:
The first sentence is good. In the next two, you've left out some words (gesserat and constituit), and repeated some others, which has changed the meaning slightly. Don't do this! Every single word is essential.
"In first light" -> more like at first light.
"When raised" -> you've translated this passively, but it's active in meaning.
Paraverunt = more like "they prepared, they made ready" (to leave, etc.) not "they are ready".
In this part, you mostly have the right idea but sometimes your English isn't grammatically correct. E.g. "the spectators' shouts" (not "spectator's shouts" -> that implies there's only one spectator!), "one of the wagons showed" (not show! wrong tense!), "the axis broke" (not "brake"), "ascended on foot" (not "climbed up by his foots.")
You're welcome!Thanks Callaina
No worries. I was thinking English probably wasn't your first language -- what is? (Just curious.)Thanks again
Not bad
I wrote this without seeing Callaina's posts, so she probably covered some of the same things:
p.1
gesserat ( < gero, gerere ) has been left out
constitere there means ‘to decide’
the phrase is ‘at first light’ i.e. at dawn
‘they [were] ready to’ works fine; if the teacher demands literal translations, then ‘they prepared to’
forum isn’t quite ‘market,’ more like central square
p.2
primum is an adverb (if it were an adjective describing the soldiers, it’d’ve been primi)
we could translate ‘exhibebant’ as just 'had' or 'bore'. again, depends on how literal the teacher is.
Caesar wasn’t quite an emperor, and the passage doesn’t mention the word, so I’d remove it. It does however mention in conspectum, which we should translate. (nominative: conspectus)
in English the word is ‘axle,’ like in cars.
‘[while Caesar’s chariot] was passing’
the phrase is ‘by foot’
capitolinum is the object of ‘climbed [or went] up’
I wrote this without seeing Callaina's posts, so she probably covered some of the same things:
p.1
gesserat ( < gero, gerere ) has been left out
constitere there means ‘to decide’
the phrase is ‘at first light’ i.e. at dawn
‘they [were] ready to’ works fine; if the teacher demands literal translations, then ‘they prepared to’
forum isn’t quite ‘market,’ more like central square
p.2
primum is an adverb (if it were an adjective describing the soldiers, it’d’ve been primi)
we could translate ‘exhibebant’ as just 'had' or 'bore'. again, depends on how literal the teacher is.
Caesar wasn’t quite an emperor, and the passage doesn’t mention the word, so I’d remove it. It does however mention in conspectum, which we should translate. (nominative: conspectus)
in English the word is ‘axle,’ like in cars.
‘[while Caesar’s chariot] was passing’
the phrase is ‘by foot’
capitolinum is the object of ‘climbed [or went] up’
Very cool; I'm pretty sure I'd heard of Tamazight, but I knew/little nothing about it. It's great that you're learned English well enough to learn Latin in English nowFirst language is "Tamazight"
I would have said "was showing" or "displayed" (closer to the meaning in Latin, and it works perfectly idiomatically in English as well...)