With my inner power, I create a ball/sphere of energy.

paulmoore

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This is another one that I am uncertain about. I guess it will depend on which one sounds better. If I could get a translation for each one, that would be most wonderful. Thanks!

With my inner power, I create a ball of energy.
or
With my inner power, I create a sphere of energy.
 

Iohannes Aurum

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Cum mea potestas interior, sphaeram energiae cre[o-long:2tqa41cm][/o-long:2tqa41cm]

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Imprecator

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Iohannes Aurum dixit:
Cum mea potestas interior, sphaeram energiae cre[o-long:91xzwjpx][/o-long:91xzwjpx]
The usage of cum is incorrect, and the sentence in any case calls for the ablative (potestate inferiore); leaving out the cum would make it correct. I'm not sure if the post-classical word energia would be understood in the modern scientific sense- I'm more inclined toward interpreting it as "exuberance, vigor". Personally, I'd use the ubiquitous vis (viris) instead.

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Iohannes Aurum

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Mea potestate interiore, sphaeram viris mysticae creō

I threw in mysticae, since viris alone can be interpreted as "strength" and adding mysticae allows the original context to be preserved, given that the OP is writing a fantasy novel.
 
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viris is the dative/ablative plural of vir, viri m. (man). I don't think this makes sense here
 

Tacitus Arctous

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"Potestate interiore usus sphaeram energiae creo"

Using my inner power I create a sphere of energy.
"Mea" is not necessary here.
 

Iohannes Aurum

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Actually, for v[i-long:6lgrrzjd][/i-long:6lgrrzjd]s, the genitive is exactly the same.
 

paulmoore

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Tacitus Arctous dixit:
"Potestate interiore usus sphaeram energiae creo"

Using my inner power I create a sphere of energy.
"Mea" is not necessary here.
I like that, shall I wait for another to confirm before I use, or is it good to go?
 
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